You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: • Say that you liked their photos of your family • Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event • Give them the details of the event.

#photos #photographer #event

Dear John The reason why

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am writing

this

letter is that

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am writing to express my sincere gratitude for the amazing

photos

you took of my family during our recent photo session.Your talent and you

were taken

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photos

every

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of every

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special

moments

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, and we are absolutely thrilled with the results.My family

very

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satisfied

your

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hard work and they want

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you to be our special photographer at

family

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a family

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event

. After seeing the incredible work you did

wit

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our family

photos

,I would like to invitation for you to be our photographer at a special upcoming family

event

.We will

celebrating

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my grandfather’s 60th birthday anniversary on 29 February at Humo wedding hall. It will be a moment

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will

be full of love,laughter,and cherished memories, and we believe you can take

photos

of all unforgettable moments. The

event

will start around 19:00 pm with

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sit down

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dinner,speeches,

dancing

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and dancing

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also

. We are expecting around 200 guests to attend, and we would like group

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and individual portraits. If you are available on 29 February and interested in being our photographer again,

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we will

would

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be thrilled to have you. Thank you once again for your wonderful work with my family

photos

, we

will

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hope you join us

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special

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this special

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. Warm regards Akbarshoh

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task achievement

Ensure the introduction is clear and directly addresses the purpose of the letter. You've done a good job expressing gratitude, but the opening could be more specific about the reason for writing, linking directly to the request.

task achievement

Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. While your tone is generally suitable, consider polishing it to ensure it's uniformly polite and professional, especially in the paragraphs detailing the event.

coherence cohesion

Organize the letter logically with clear paragraphs for each main idea. Your letter is generally well-structured, but reviewing the transition between expressing gratitude and making a new request could make the flow even smoother.

coherence cohesion

Use a variety of cohesive devices (e.g., linking words, pronouns) effectively to enhance the flow of the letter. You have used some, but increasing their variety and accuracy can improve the letter's cohesion.

coherence cohesion

Review the letter for minor grammatical errors and typos to enhance clarity and professionalism. This includes correct date formats, punctuation, and verb agreements.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

210 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You had some photos of your family taken by a professional photographer. Write a letter to the photographer. In your letter: • Say that you liked their photos of your family • Ask them to be your photographer at a special family event • Give them the details of the event.

Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be shut down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.

Government investment in the arts,such as music and theatre is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public service instead. Do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays in many countries young people leave rural areas to study or work in cities. What are the reasons for this? Do the benefits of this outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, we are seeing an increasing amount of violence on television, and this is having a negative impact on children's behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that we learn best through in-person interaction with a teacher in a classroom. Others believe that online learning is more effective. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.