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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of nose very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system.The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write letter to the hotel.In the letter describe the problem at the hotel explain what the manager had said at the time say what you want the manager to do

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Ali.
This
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reason
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the reason
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 I am addressing you is that I want to describe the trouble at the
hotel
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 and
also
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 tell some my some sentences to your
manager
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,Mr John. I had been living at the
hotel
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 that I rented from your
manager
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 for
a
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just a week.But to my surprise,
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 voice was coming out of the
hotel
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’s central heating system
which
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 I
was
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 not stand
this
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 situation.Needless to say,I was very angry and very tired. One more thing that I have to mention is that
central
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 heating system
have
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 to
fixed
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 when I stayed in the
hotel
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.
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,I called your
hotel
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’s
manager
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then
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 he
came
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 my room which
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 number room.I
was explaining
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 everything situation.But,your
hotel
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manager
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 didn’t understand my speech and he slapped me. I was very upset in that case. I
expect
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 Mr John’s promise and sent me some presents.If not,I will contact
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hotel
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the hotel
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 director and complain about what happened here. I hope you will understand my situation. Best regards, Khamidov Ali

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greeting and closing
Ensure the letter begins and ends appropriately for formal correspondence. Starting with 'Dear Sir or Madam,' is suitable, but consider a more formal closing statement than 'Best regards,' such as 'Yours faithfully,'
logical structure
The organization of your ideas can be improved. Make sure each paragraph has a clear focus. Begin with a paragraph explaining the purpose of the letter, follow with details about the problem, what was promised by the manager, and conclude with what you would like them to do.
single idea per paragraph
Keeping one idea per paragraph can immensely improve clarity. Separate the description of the problem, the interaction with the manager, and your expectations into different paragraphs.
complete response
To fully address the task, ensure that the letter clearly states the problem (central heating noise), what the manager said at the time, and specifically what compensation or action you expect (e.g., refund, apology). Include these details explicitly.
suitable writing tone
Use a tone that is appropriate for a formal letter. Avoid informal expressions and focus on polite, but firm requests for action. Phrases like 'to my surprise, unusual voice was coming out' could be replaced with 'I was disturbed by a loud noise from the central heating system.',

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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