Question: You recently received letter from a friend asking for your advice on go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.Write a letter to this friend.In your letter: °Say why she will not enjoy going to college °Explain why getting a job is a good idea °Suggest the type of job that would be suitable.
Hi Ruslan
I am writing
this
letter that I want you to know taking place in college has a problems
rather than having a Correct the article-noun agreement
problem
job
.
I have got your latest message. From my point of view
you should get a Add a comma
view,
job
. Because you have already noticed that your parents
unable to assist you Add a verb
parents are
parents were
by
financially.
Change preposition
apply
Nevertheless
if you apply to college you will face plenty of Add a comma
Nevertheless,
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
such
as being bored, not understanding subjects and also
you will be under pressure.Therefore
you have to find a job
which can suits
you. In my Change the verb form
suit
opinion
being a shop assistant can Add a comma
opinion,
suits
you. Change the verb form
suit
As well as
you have a bit knowledge
of mathematics. Change preposition
of knowledge
In
addition
Add a comma
addition,
this
job
pays well. You will be satisfied with this
position of employment.
By the way
if you do your best at Add a comma
way,
this
job
you will be able Add a comma
job,
get
extra payment.
Make your decision as soon as possible before it is too late
I will wait for your reply.
Add the particle
to get
Correct the word
Yours
Your
sincerely
NurbekCorrect your spelling
Yours
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logical structure
Try to improve the structure of your letter by organizing your ideas more clearly. Begin with a proper introduction, followed by separate paragraphs for each main point, and conclude with a suitable closing statement.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. The first paragraph should introduce the topic, the second and third should expand on your main points, and the final paragraph should conclude the letter.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a more consistent and formal tone throughout your letter. Avoid colloquial language and ensure your reasons and suggestions are clearly stated and well-supported.
complete response
Provide more concrete examples and reasons why college might not be enjoyable and why a job could be beneficial. This will help strengthen your argument and make your advice more convincing.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.