Some people believe that universities should only offer places to students with high marks. While others believe that people of all ages should be allowed even if they don’t do well in school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Education
indeed plays a crucial role in people's lives. Some say that a
university
education
is only for those who get high
scores
at their high school level
whereas
others opine that should be permitted
all
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students
without
barriers
of
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to
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high academic
scores
even if they get lower marks.
This
essay discusses both viewpoints and I strongly agree with the latter opinion for the following reasons. On the one hand,
college
studies are only the bright
students
who master
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education
because finishing a
degree
course is not
a
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easy task and they should put more effort during the
degree
course, so bright learners can achieve and
study
in particular
higher
education
without getting any troubles because they already studied extraordinarily, and
as a result
, completing degrees without any errors.
For example
, the Indian MIT
University
only provides enrollment for
students
who got higher
scores
in high school public examinations because
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their
students
should be
in
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brilliant to
study
the hardest
education
. Needless to say,
having
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good
scores
learners can
study
easily and get good
scores
too.
On the other hand
, all
students
should be enrolled
to
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college
studies because
education
is a common aspect everyone should get that without any
barriers
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it
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should not based on
scores
.
This
means in-active pupils can
study
well after joining
college
through a quality
of
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education
by
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professional
of
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lectures.
In addition
, these days, the job market has
huge
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demand
in
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a applicant should complete and attend any
degree
courses, so a
university
education
can determine their future career by getting
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with
good
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salary.
For instance
, in India, more than 60% of the unemployment ratio because
of
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they do not have a
degree
to get a job. Needless to say, all
students
have a chance to
study
further
education
after completing their high school without
barriers
of
scores
.
To conclude
,
although
bright
students
only enter a
university
because they can
study
better without
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, all
students
have a chance to
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a
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university
because their future career will be determined by a
degree
.
However
, in my opinion, about
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, I strongly agree
with
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that all learners should
enroll
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in
college
studies without
barriers
of
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scores
.
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