Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

It is argued that nations are approaching
to
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a more equal state owing to the purchasability of the same item around the globe.I believe that
this
is a positive trend
as
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such
this
will lead to a reduction of money wastage by citizens and help to reduce conflicts among different parts of the world. To commence with, the purchasibility of anything
in
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everywhere will eliminate unnecessary expenditure of individuals. When goods are
territory specific
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, people have to travel to those places to purchase the
product
while
wasting a lot on travel and accommodation.
For instance
, until 2015 january if a foreigner wants to take a Sri Lankan traditional mask they have to visit the place as
its
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not available for the export market by paying air tickets and all other expenses.
Hence
,
this
availability of every
product
in any part of the globe will make it cheaper for the customer. Other than that,
this
reduces the chance of fights among countries in search of other luxuries. Humans always have the urge to have what in the other's plate, and if others are not allowed to taste it, a conflict may develop. When
this
happen
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between states, it can
leads
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to
develop
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wars between territories.
For example
,Americans are always trying to
attch
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attack
middle
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este
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Eastern
countries in search of fuel and if they export fuel to America these conflicts may
be ended
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soon.
Thus
,
this
can create a more peaceful environment among nations. In conclusion, easy access to any
product
globally caused less devastation of money and reduced conflicting attitudes among citizens . As
such
,
this
writer is in the firm notion that
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purchasibility of any
product
every
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in every
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part of the globe driven
similarity
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the similarity
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of countries as a positive trend.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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