The chart below shows figures for attendance at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and December 2017.

The bar chart compares the percentage of
people
who attended hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland classified by their age in
December
2016 and 2017.
Overall
,
it is clear that
children aged less than 5
years
and older
people
who are at least 75
years
old make up the highest proportion of attendants.
Also
, the number of attendances has experienced a slight rise during the period shown. With regard to children who were less than 5
years
old, they made up about 50 persons of 1000 population in
December
2016,
while
the figure increased slightly to about 55 persons. The number of those aged 5 to 15 and 16 to 44 were roughly 21 and 30, rising to approximately one or two
people
each after one year. Regarding those aged 45 to 64 and
also
65 to 74, who attended hospital emergency care departments, it can be seen that their number is roughly the same, at about 30 individuals.
Finally
, the highest amount of attendance was
due to
older
people
who are 75
years
old and over, with almost 65
people
in
December
2016, increasing to 70 persons after a year in
December
2016.
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