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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You're visiting a town where you once worked. Write to a friend you worked with there. Include the following in your letter: -Tell your friend about your life now - Give her deatils of your visit - Arrange how you can meet

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Dear Shayla, I trust
this
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 letter finds you in the best of health and high spirits. You will be happy to know that, next week I'm gonna visit
to
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yout
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your
 city for
study
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a study
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 trip with my friends. I want to meet you
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 time. Cuz long time no see. Now, I am studying in "Westminister". Coming soon, Summer holiday and we have decided to take a vacation in Samarkand, where your hometown. As per my plans, I really want to see "Registan" and first of all, I
wil
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will
 see
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.
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, my friends and I will call on lots of different and quiet
place
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 to relax
from
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 holiday.
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,
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 historical
place
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 and restaurants. I
wolud
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would
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 its dining establishments. It was my dream to go to a five-star hotel in Samarkand and I want to do it during getaway. If you want to see me, You
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 call
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this
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 weekend
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 I will
available
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. Please if you come
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 weekend, could you bring me "Samarkand non"? Please note my new phone number 7346987 and feel free to give
a
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me a
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call if you miss
me
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 voice. Eagerly waiting to meet you. Best wishes, Bayramoy

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logical structure
Ensure the letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end. Each paragraph should focus on a specific topic or idea, which will help in organizing the content better and making the letter more coherent.
greeting and closing
A personal letter usually starts with a friendly greeting and ends with an appropriate closing. The use of 'Dear' is appropriate, but consider closing with a more personal touch, such as 'Looking forward to meeting you soon' followed by your name.
single idea per paragraph
Try to separate the letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one idea: your life now, details of your visit, and arranging to meet. This will help the reader easily follow the flow of the letter.
complete response
Your response covers all the points requested in the task which is excellent. However, including more specifics about your current life and details about the visit could enhance your letter. For instance, mention some highlights or changes in your life since moving and specify dates or times for your visit.
suitable writing tone
The tone is friendly, which is suitable for a letter to a friend. However, ensure the language used is consistent throughout the letter. Avoid using informal expressions such as 'gonna' and 'cuz' in written English, and check for spelling and grammar mistakes for a more positive impression.
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