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Reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

#features #comparison
The given pie charts illustrate the proportion of accessing the
news
 in various
medium
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mediums
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such
 as TV, Ratio, Print,
Online
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and Online
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 and not specified in various two
nations
Canada
 and
Austaralia
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Australia
. Units are measured by percentage. From an
overall
 perspective, TV and online are the most
accessing
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accessible
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medium
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mediums
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 of
news
 these both
nations
.
While
 not specified is the least preference among these both
nations
. In detail,
online
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the online
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medium
 of
news
accessing
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access
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 in
Australia
 is the highest preference as compared to
the
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apply
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Canada
, which accounts for just over half and 36% respectively.
Canada
 is dominated
Australia
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by Australia
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of
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in
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 accessing
news
 by television, at two-fifths and 37% respectively.
Similarly
, in
Canada
,
print
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the print
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medium
 of
news
accessing
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access
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 is 14 per cent but
Australia
 has half of
Canada
.
Furthermore
,
Ratio
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the Ratio
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 mode of
news
 in
canadais
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canada is
 17% but
Australia
 has
the
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a
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 significant difference from
Canada
, which is just 2%. These
both
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apply
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two
nations
 have
a
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the
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least
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lowest
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 proportion of not specified
news
 accessing, which accounts for
Canada
 has 3 percentage and
Australia
 has 2% only.
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Task Achievement
Ensure the introduction provides a clear overview of what the charts display before diving into specifics. This sets a solid foundation for your essay.
Task Achievement
Improve clarity by directly comparing the percentages of each news medium between the two nations. Use comparative language (e.g., 'higher than,' 'less than') to make the differences more explicit.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider introducing each paragraph with a clear topic sentence that guides the reader on what aspect of the data you will discuss. This will improve the logical flow of your analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use concluding statements to summarize the main differences or significant trends observed between the two nations. This ensures that your essay has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
Coherence and Cohesion
Carefully check for spelling and grammatical errors ('Ratio' should be 'Radio,' 'canadais' should be 'Canada is'). Misinterpretations can distract readers from the content of your essay.

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