IELTS WRITING Task 1. The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

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The given line graph demonstrates the

visitor's

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visitor

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ratio of attractive

placec

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places

place

including

Art

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the Art

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Gallery, Pavilion, Pier and Festival of Brighton in England between the years 1980 and 2010.

Overall

, the most tourists in

total

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the total

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amount of

visitis

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visits

visitors

entirly

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entirely

entire

span of study went to the Pavilion,

whereas

the least

visitis

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visits

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were

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was

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were

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taken from Pier. Festival was hosting

the

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constant number of

peoples

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people

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during the studied time, and Art

gallary

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gallery

experienced to

oposite

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opposite

shoks

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shocks

shots

in visit rate at the

beginig

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beginning

of the study. Pavillion saw a sharp rise after 1985 and reached

the

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peak at about 45% in 1995,

then

has

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continued dropping marginally towards just above 30% after a sharp decline in 2000.

Festival

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The festival

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visiting rate remained constant from 1985 after a slight

decreas

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decrease

from 30 to around 25

percent

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per cent

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. Pier visitors portion had been fluctuating around 10 % over the 19th decade

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and slightly grew up to just above 20% from 2000 to 2010. And the

last

attraction, Art Gallery, after experiencing a peak at 35 % in 1985

drroped

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drooped

drop

down suddenly to 20 % in 1990 and after a short period

constant

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of constant

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visiting at

this

level, it fell to under 10%

at the end

period

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the period

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

199 words

4.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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IELTS WRITING Task 1. The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton attractions in England from 1980 to 2010.

The rise of social media has affected personal, relationships and society as a whole. Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages?

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this Statement?

There are different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is traditional music of a country more important tha international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?