Some believe that sport competitions are a source of emotional stress for young people. Therefore, youth should be banned from participating in sport competitions. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Allegedly,
sport
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competitions
and their effects
in
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youths
'
lives
are given significant attention. Many individuals believe that
youths
should be banned from participating in
sport
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competitions
, so
as a
consequence
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they give additional emotional
stress
. I agree
youths
should be aware
about
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their mental well-being, and some
sport
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races may disrupt their mental health, but
engage
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in
competitions
can
edeavour
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encourage
them to be more
contious
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conscious
about
real life
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issues. On the one hand, in today's
worlds
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, students suffer from anxiety in many circumstances and one of them is in the
sport
competition. They want to acquire golden medals and they allocate most of their time to achieve
this
goal.
For instance
, many juveniles from all over the world attempt to enter
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Olympics
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games.
Additionally
, they
practice
extensively
,
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and strive to cope with
their
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pressures during their days.
Therefore
, many of these young athletes not only suffer from depression,
stress
, and helplessness, but they
also
cannot handle their school lessons. In fact, they should stabilize their mental well-being before engaging
any
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competition, because mental health
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a pivotal role in students'
lives
.
On the other hand
, juveniles should
practice
a lot in competition occasions, and discover appropriate strategies to fight
with
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their
stress
due to
the fact that they might confront
with
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other pressures in their future
lives
.
For instance
, either they must seize career opportunities and compete with other employees, or they have to pass university entrance exams.
Therefore
, they must improve their
mind-set
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and
practice
a lot to manage their
stress
in
such
situations. In conclusion, coaches have considerable responsibility to
practice
with young athletes and improve their brain performance in
sport
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competitions
, not ban them.
In addition
,
such
competitions
encourage
youths
to have
a
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significant performance in their future
lives
, so they should learn many tricks to perform better in stressful positions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional stress
  • Young athletes
  • High-pressure environments
  • Resilience
  • Discipline
  • Teamwork
  • Supportive coaching
  • Adequate rest
  • Personal growth
  • Structured competition
  • Goals
  • Manage failure
  • Celebrate achievements
  • Personal development
  • Mental health
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