Some people think that global environment problems shold be dralt with internationally. Others, however, believe that they have to be tackled domestically. What is your opinion?

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Illnesses are a big problem of humanity and some

people

think that it is more important to spend money on promoting a healthy

lifestyle

than funding the treatment for

people

who are already ill. In the essay, I want to write what I agree with and what I disagree with. The first

reason

why I agree is that a healthy

lifestyle

can prevent illnesses and we should promote it among the young generation because we should take care of our health from a young age. The second

reason

why I agree is that healthy

people

are much happier

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because sport helps them to relax and throw out all negative from

our

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their

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mind

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minds

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Food

is the main part of a healthy

lifestyle

because you are what you eat.If you eat

a healthy

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healthy food

a portion of healthy food

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food

for

example

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example,

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salads, fruits, vegetables,

soups

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and soups

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then

you will be healthy, but if you eat junk

food

, fizzy drinks,

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and a

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lot of meat and sugar

then

you will be fat and sick. The first

reason

why I disagree is that

people

all over the world are suffering from different illnesses now and we should not forget about them. They need treatment and care and if we start to spend money to promote a healthy

lifestyle

they will get less medicine. The second

reason

why I disagree is that a lot of

people

do not want to eat healthy

food

and do sport. they will drink alcohol and eat junk

food

and it does not matter how much money you will spend. In

conclusion

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conclusion,

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I would like to say that we should take care of

people

who have problems with health

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because we are humans and we should help each other.

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Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
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4Word repetition
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282 words

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people think that global environment problems shold be dralt with internationally. Others, however, believe that they have to be tackled domestically. What is your opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

many high level of positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than fifty percent female. compnies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of these positions to women. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funds from government in order for them to continue with their work. To what extent do you agree?

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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?