The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Pie chart)
This
pie charts
depicts the working time that adults spend on different activities Change the determiner
chart
in particular
country in 1958 and 2008.
It is clear from the graph that percentage
in 2008 was highest Correct article usage
the percentage
from
1958, Change preposition
in
nevertheless
some
of activites
were Correct your spelling
activities
high
than Correct word choice
higher
2008
, and Change preposition
in 2008
this
what
we going to figure out in Add a missing verb
is what
next
paragraph.
Correct article usage
the next
According to
what is shown ,about time working
in 1950 Sleeping rate was in
increase 1958 Change preposition
to
then
it reduce
from 32% to Wrong verb form
reduced
be
25% in 2008, as well
as Going out (with friends or family) had experienced Unnecessary verb
apply
Correct article usage
a swiftly
swiftly
fall from 19% to 6% huge change .
Change the word
swift
However
in 2008 everything change
approximately starting from Wrong verb form
changed
working
rate Correct article usage
the working
was
going up to 42% in 2008 Unnecessary verb
apply
similarly
travel to work rose of
2% to 8% Change preposition
apply
along with
other interests or playing sports has the same percentage which is 8%, in addition
Relaxing at home become 13% from 8%.Submitted by reem2006303 on
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