The charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (Pie chart)

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Percentage
Proportion
Fluctuations
Increase
Decrease
Time allocation
Working adults
Activities
Comparison
Trend
Shift
Changes
Impact
Work-life balance
Lifestyle
Evolution
Daily routines
Technological changes
Social changes
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