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The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
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The
map
 illustrates
center
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 of Paris
the
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where the
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 company wants to open
restaurant
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a restaurant
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with
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expect the location of
this
restaurant
.
Overall
.in the south of the
mape
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map
 is the Eiffel Tower is the
popular
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most popular
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place
in
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on
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this
map
others
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other
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peolpe
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people
less
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are less
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 common to other places
in
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on
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 the
map
. In the south of the
map
 or the left of
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the bank
a bank
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bank
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bank,
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 there are 4  places I will start
with
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within
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in
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on
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 the left
it
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apply
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is
sports
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the sports
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center
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centre
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people
peolpe
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people
likes
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like
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this
place
 because if
the
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people have free time they
are going
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go
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 to west time with good things more over the write of
sport
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the sport
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center
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centre
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 is the Eiffel Tower the majority of people
went
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go
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 to
this
place
 to
taking
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 pictures next to
this
place
 is the
restaurant
 flowed by behind the
restaurant
 is the park
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however
 the
last
 one in
this
 direction is
art
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an art
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 gallery and in the middle of
this
map
 is river Seine and
debliy
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debility
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 footbridge others side of
middle
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the middle
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 of
map
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the map
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 are two bridges
Firest
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First
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 one is Lena and the second
isnot
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is not
isn't
 far from first one it is Bri Hakem bridge and bri hakem station In the north of
map
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the map
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 in the west of it is the second
restaurant
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people
peolpe
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people
 who expect the
place
 in the future
however
 in the north of the
map
 there is the second park and in the east of
map
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the map
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 is the aquarium
that is
 for fish and the
last
 thing is A maritime museum is north of the parks
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, restaurant, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 9 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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