The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

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IELTS Writing Task Chart for The map shows the centre of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
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The
map
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

illustrates
center
Add an article
the center

The noun phrase center seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of Paris
the
Rephrase
where the

There may be an adverb issue here.

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company wants to open
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

restaurant
Add an article
a restaurant

The noun phrase restaurant seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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with
Change preposition
apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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expect the location of
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

restaurant
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

.
Overall
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

.in the south of the
mape
Correct your spelling
map

If you don’t want mape to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

is the Eiffel Tower is the
popular
Correct quantifier usage
most popular

It seems that quantifier use may be incorrect here.

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place
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

map
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

others
Correct quantifier usage
other

It seems that quantifier use may be incorrect here.

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peolpe
Correct your spelling
people

If you don’t want peolpe to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

less
Add a missing verb
are less

It seems that you are missing a verb. Consider adding it.

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common to other places
in
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the
map
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. In the south of the
map
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

or the left of
Add an article
the bank
a bank
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bank
Add a comma
bank,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase In the south of the map or the left of bank. Consider adding a comma.

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there are 4  places I will start
with
Correct your spelling
within

The word with in seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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in
Change preposition
on

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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the left
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply

It seems that there is a pronoun problem here.

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is
sports
Correct article usage
the sports

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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center
Change the spelling
centre

The spelling of center is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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Correct your spelling
people
peolpe
Correct your spelling
people

If you don’t want peolpe to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

likes
Replace the word
like

The word likes doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

place
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

because if
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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people have free time they
are going
Wrong verb form
go

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb are going. Consider changing it.

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to west time with good things more over the write of
sport
Correct article usage
the sport

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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center
Change the spelling
centre

The spelling of center is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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is the Eiffel Tower the majority of people
went
Wrong verb form
go

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb went. Consider changing it.

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to
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

place
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

to
taking
Change the form of the verb
take

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb taking. Consider changing it.

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pictures next to
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

place
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

is the
restaurant
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

flowed by behind the
restaurant
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

is the park
Add the comma(s)
, however,

It appears that you are missing a comma or two with the interrupter however. Consider adding the comma(s).

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however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

the
last
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

one in
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

direction is
art
Add an article
an art

The noun phrase art gallery seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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gallery and in the middle of
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

map
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

is river Seine and
debliy
Correct your spelling
debility
deploy

If you don’t want debliy to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

footbridge others side of
middle
Add an article
the middle

The noun phrase middle seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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of
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

map
Add an article
the map

The noun phrase map seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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are two bridges
Firest
Correct your spelling
First

The word Firest doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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one is Lena and the second
isnot
Correct your spelling
is not
isn't

If you don’t want isnot to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

far from first one it is Bri Hakem bridge and bri hakem station In the north of
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

map
Correct article usage
the map

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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in the west of it is the second
restaurant
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Correct your spelling
people
peolpe
Correct your spelling
people

If you don’t want peolpe to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

who expect the
place
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

in the future
however
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

in the north of the
map
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

there is the second park and in the east of
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

map
Correct article usage
the map

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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is the aquarium
that is
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

for fish and the
last
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

thing is A maritime museum is north of the parks

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, restaurant, place with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 9 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • boost business
  • public transportation
  • accessibility
  • upscale neighborhood
  • demographic
  • premium
  • menu items
  • competition
  • market saturation
  • rental costs
  • operational costs
  • profit margins
  • foot traffic
  • amenities
  • business offices
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