some people think that social networking apps are beneficial for society, other people think that it has a bad impact on society. discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many argue that
applications
which
allows
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us to communicate with our friends and strangers are useful to us because of the interaction need we have as humans,
while
others say the opposite
due to
the addiction they create. I think as long as we can limit the
time
we spend on those
applications
, they are essential to us as humans. Some people tend to see the addiction communication
apps
make, and
therefore
find them harmful to people. Many experience endless group chats with friends or 3-hour Twitter scrolling sessions, and these are the results of the chemical in our brains named "dopamine", which makes us highly dependent
to
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itself
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ourselves
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. To face
this
problem, companies
who
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produce computers and mobile phones started to build certain
time
management solutions to prevent our dependence on
apps
,
such
as screen
time
blockers or
time
limitations for specific
apps
.
However
, as a dopamine addict myself, I find the addiction preventable by implementing certain solutions,
such
as turning
of
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the app notifications or using only several platforms for socialising, and I believe by doing
this
we can still experience the good sides of these
softwares
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software
. Some say we need to communicate with each other through social media platforms, and since communication is
the
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one of
the
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needs of us as
human-beings
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, these
applications
are necessary for us. Without communication, we basically prevent ourselves from the happiness which we can easily experience by just sending certain "memes" or reading the comments section of a video we like. I think we have seen the importance of interaction with others back in quarantine days. Almost everyone
could not
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get out of their home and we stick to each other via
apps
such
as Discord, Zoom,
Whatsapp
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and Telegram
and
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I have accepted the essential part of
apps
which allow us to communicate.
To conclude
, even though we can easily get addicted
by
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the
applications
we use in order to
socilise
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socialise
, I think with certain limitations, they meet our basic needs and
therefore
are beneficial to us.
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