More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?
There is
increase
in the trend Add an article
an increase
the increase
in
individuals shifting their locations to big Change preposition
of
cities
to achieve certain level
of Fix the agreement mistake
levels
life
standards. Although
governments can make certain improvements by dividing big cities
and improving the areas
equally, there are still major issues in large places
, such
as crowded traffic
and polluted air.
More and more want to live in city centres or developed towns where life
is faster and everyone needs to hurry to keep up the
flow of Change preposition
with the
life
. However
this
fast way of life
causes crowded traffic
, and as a result
of
Change preposition
apply
that
, toxic air conditions. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Although
life
in metropolitan places
is fast, it ironically creates slow traffic
movement and I think spending our lives waiting
a light to turn green over and over again in 10 minutes is the worst way of both moving fast and living in better conditions. Add the preposition
waiting for
In addition
, people
have to breathe air that is
harmful to their system and there is no solution to that in bigger cities
,
because nearly everywhere is equally polluted by certain vehicles in Remove the comma
apply
traffic
and gas released by industrial buildings. I do not think any of these problems can be solved in large areas
and therefore
people
migrate
to crowded Correct pronoun usage
who migrate
places
always have to face with
these issues.
I think in order to solve the difficulties in developed Change preposition
apply
areas
, governments should consider is
building homogenous Unnecessary verb
apply
cities
rather than putting everything into one or two places
, because placing all the important buildings in one location only creates chaos in traffic
and an over-populated neighbourhood. Take Ankara, for instance
, nearly all the important buildings are located into
a place named Kızılay and Change preposition
in
as a result
of this
, people
have to wake up at 6 AM to arrive to
their Change preposition
at
work place
which starts at 9 AM, even though it only takes 10 minutes to commute to it, if it was not located in that specific area.
Correct your spelling
workplace
To conclude
, although
more and more people
want to live in big cities
for better
Correct article usage
the better
live
standards they have, there are many big problems in these Replace the word
living
areas
such
as traffic
and pollution. However
city Add a comma
However,
life
can be more bearable with planning that can be made by governements
.Correct your spelling
governments
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