More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?
There is
increase
in the trend Add an article
an increase
the increase
in
individuals shifting their locations to big Change preposition
of
cities
to achieve certain Use synonyms
level
of Fix the agreement mistake
levels
life
standards. Use synonyms
Although
governments can make certain improvements by dividing big Linking Words
cities
and improving the Use synonyms
areas
equally, there are still major issues in large Use synonyms
places
, Use synonyms
such
as crowded Linking Words
traffic
and polluted air.
More and more want to live in city centres or developed towns where Use synonyms
life
is faster and everyone needs to hurry to keep up Use synonyms
the
flow of Change preposition
with the
life
. Use synonyms
However
Linking Words
this
fast way of Linking Words
life
causes crowded Use synonyms
traffic
, and Use synonyms
as a result
Linking Words
of
Change preposition
apply
that
, toxic air conditions. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Although
Linking Words
life
in metropolitan Use synonyms
places
is fast, it ironically creates slow Use synonyms
traffic
movement and I think spending our lives Use synonyms
waiting
a light to turn green over and over again in 10 minutes is the worst way of both moving fast and living in better conditions. Add the preposition
waiting for
In addition
, Linking Words
people
have to breathe air Use synonyms
that is
harmful to their system and there is no solution to that in bigger Linking Words
cities
Use synonyms
,
because nearly everywhere is equally polluted by certain vehicles in Remove the comma
apply
traffic
and gas released by industrial buildings. I do not think any of these problems can be solved in large Use synonyms
areas
and Use synonyms
therefore
Linking Words
people
Use synonyms
migrate
to crowded Correct pronoun usage
who migrate
places
always have to face Use synonyms
with
these issues.
I think in order to solve the difficulties in developed Change preposition
apply
areas
, governments should consider Use synonyms
is
building homogenous Unnecessary verb
apply
cities
rather than putting everything into one or two Use synonyms
places
, because placing all the important buildings in one location only creates chaos in Use synonyms
traffic
and an over-populated neighbourhood. Take Ankara, Use synonyms
for instance
, nearly all the important buildings are located Linking Words
into
a place named Kızılay and Change preposition
in
as a result
of Linking Words
this
, Linking Words
people
have to wake up at 6 AM to arrive Use synonyms
to
their Change preposition
at
work place
which starts at 9 AM, even though it only takes 10 minutes to commute to it, if it was not located in that specific area.
Correct your spelling
workplace
To conclude
, Linking Words
although
more and more Linking Words
people
want to live in big Use synonyms
cities
for Use synonyms
better
Correct article usage
the better
live
standards they have, there are many big problems in these Replace the word
living
areas
Use synonyms
such
as Linking Words
traffic
and pollution. Use synonyms
Linking Words
However
city Add a comma
However,
life
can be more bearable with planning that can be made by Use synonyms
governements
.Correct your spelling
governments
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