The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008.

The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008.
The bar graph describes the comparison of minutes of
telephone
calls used by
Autralian
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Australian
in three categories namely, Local National & International and
Mobiles
over
8-year
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period from 2001 to 2008 As the graph shows, the number of
minute
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minutes
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of
telephone
calls rose with some fluctuations. Local was the largest of minute of
telephone
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call
while
the opposite trend was true for the data for
Natonal
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National
& International and
Mobiles
. Regarding the figure for Local, from 2001 to 2005, the number of
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resident
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residents
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used
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telephone
calls increased steadily from 72 to 90. During the period from 2005 to 2008, there was
gradual
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went down between 90 and 72. In terms of National & International and
Mobiles
, there was a decline significantly between 2001 and 2008 from 38 to 61 and from 2 to 46.
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speed
increased
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of
Mobiles
was faster than National & International was 21 minutes.
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