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Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers; Some others believe that less control will help children deal with their adult life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Whether
childern
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children
 must adhere to their supervisers' obligations or not is an issue of public debate and concern.
Although
parents
 and teachers aim
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 the best life for their
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 ones, it is of the most importance to consider their freedom to not
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invaided
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invaded
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. In the following essay, I will argue why
youngesters
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youngsters
 should be free to decide for
themselve
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themselves
, despite the
unevideble
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inevitable
unenviable
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 family and authorities. On the one hand, there is a widely held opinion that it is essential that children follow the
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 rules on account of the fact that they are more experienced
as well as
 they want the best for those ones. To clarify, these
supervisers
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supervisors
 have a tendency to
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organise
 child's life based on their own childhood memories and happenings.
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In spite
 of the fact that they might force the child with something toward which she or he
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 not show partiality, those memories might bring a myriad of
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traumas
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itself
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themselves
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. A case in point could be the sense of superiority
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 by
parents
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 regulations and life-planning.
Hence
, young children have been
tromotized
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traumatized
 by the way their
parents
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 them to act and manifest their desires. Freedom,
on the other hand
, will
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contribute
 to a number of delighted features in
childern's
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children's
 behaviors. The chief one would be the ability
of having
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 self-esteem in diverse situations. Confronting the consequences of their action, younger people have been
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 to form an
indipendent
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independent
 personality in order to not demolish their
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.
However
, there are always some oldest who are protecting them from far behind not getting harmed and damaged.
Likewise
,
this
 action of
parents
 will lead to thicker skin and become more powerful
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future
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.
Thus
, if adolescents find
this
 opportunity to bring up
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 their own, they will become more
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invincible
. To encapsulate,
child
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a child
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superviser
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supervisor
 might have been raised as a less secure person in life,
nevertheless
,
self confidance
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self-confidence
 is what children without obligation will gain
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the
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time.
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, I argued why
this
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happened
happens
happen
 based on some grounds.
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Task Achievement
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion clearly state your position and summarize the main points of your argument. You've done this well, but it can be made more succinct for a stronger impact.
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Task Achievement
To strengthen your argument, provide more specific and varied examples. This makes your points more convincing and engaging for the reader.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on developing a more logical structure in your essay by using clear paragraphs that each focus on a single main idea. Including topic sentences at the beginning of paragraphs can help with this.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use linking phrases to better connect your ideas and paragraphs. This will enhance the flow of your argument and make your essay easier to follow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discipline
  • Autonomy
  • Independency
  • Creativity
  • Conformity
  • Rebelliousness
  • Maturation
  • Guidance
  • Cognitive development
  • Protector
  • Evaluator
  • Boundaries
  • Negotiation
  • Empowerment
  • Self-discipline
  • Regulatory guidelines
  • Flexibility
  • Adaptation
  • Socio-emotional skills
  • Decision-making process
  • Moral compass
  • Real-world challenges
  • Controlled environment
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