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The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions

The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions
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The first
graph
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 illustrates the data about the rate of the world's
population
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 (in millions) between 1800 and 2100, and the second
graph
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 depicts the
growth
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 of the urban
population
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 for the next 25 years.
Overall
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, what stands out from the first
graph
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 is that the global
population
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 is expected to experience a dramatic rise, before a major decline.
According to
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 the second
graph
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, the enlargement in the
population
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 of developed regions is predicted to face a gradual rise,
while
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 the
figure
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 for developing countries won’t change over the given period. In terms of world
population
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growth
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, its
figure
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 has seen a continuous increase since 1800. From 1800 to 1920, the number rose slowly from 1
billion
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 to just under 2
billion
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.
However
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, the
figure
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then
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 soared, and currently is around 7.5
billion
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. The
graph
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also
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 shows the future trend for the global
population
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. The number is looking forward to peaking at just above 8
billion
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 in 2040 and 2050.
Next,
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the
figure
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 will gradually drop by roughly 2
billion
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 in the
last
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 2 decades. The predictions
then
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 illustrate the
growth
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 in the urban area’s
population
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.
While
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, developed countries are planning to see
a
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steady
growth
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 from just above 2
billion
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 to 4
billion
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 in 25 years, developing countries' figures will remain stable at approximately 1.3
billion
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, population, growth, figure, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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