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The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.

The pie charts show the electricity generated in Germany and France from all sources and renewables in the year 2009.
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The four pie charts compare the
electricity
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 generated between
Germany
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 and
France
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 during 2009, and it is measured in billions
kWh
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that conventional thermal was the main source of
electricity
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 in
Germany
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,
whereas
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 nuclear was the main source in
France
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. The bulk of
electricity
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 in
Germany
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, whose total output was 560 billion kWh, came from conventional thermal, at 59.6%. In
France
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, the total output was lower, at 510 billion kWh, and
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 to
Germany
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, conventional thermal accounted for just 10.3%, with most
electricity
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 coming from nuclear power (76%). In
Germany
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, the proportion of nuclear power generated
electricity
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 was only
one fifth
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 of the total. Moving on to renewables,
this
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 accounted for quite similar proportions for both countries, ranging from around 14% to 17% of the total
electricity
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 generated. In detail, in
Germany
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, most of the renewables consisted of wind and biomass,
totaling
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 around 75%, which was far higher than for hydroelectric (17.7%) and solar (6.1%). The situation was very different in
France
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, where hydroelectric made up 80.5% of renewable
electricity
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, with biomass, wind and solar making up the remaining 20%. Neither country used geothermal energy.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, germany, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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