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The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
given
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apply
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bar chart illustrates the lowest
as well as
 highest air
pollutants level
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pollutant levels
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 in 4 specific cities during 2000.
Overall
,it could be seen that a majority of both SO2
along
with
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apply
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N2O
is
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are
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 gathered in city of the
mexican
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Mexico
.
Additionally
,Los Angeles and Beijing are two
cites
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cities
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 with the least SO2 and N2O recorded. With regard to the pollution of N2O,Mexico
city
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City
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 topped the list with 207 micrograms per m3
whereas
 the
minium
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minimum
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 of N2O was only half of
this
(113).
Likewise
,Los Angeles saw a lower number of almost half of maximum N2O concentration of 104 which tripled the minimum amount of 39 micrograms per m3.Calcutta and Beijing are two cities with
lowest
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the lowest
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 N2O recorded with only 52 and 54 maximum
as well as
 30 and 14
mocrograms
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micrograms
 per m3 minimum,respectively. Turning to the remaining air pollutant where Mexico has seen the
most
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highest
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 SO2 concentration at 200 maximum.In terms of Los Angeles,
this
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apply
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 is the city with
least
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the least
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 amount of SO2
which
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with
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 only 10 maximum and 2 minimum
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words n with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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