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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart illustrates the number of power
that is
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 renewable in a total of 4 specific
countries
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 between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
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,it could be seen that Iceland
as well as
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 Sweden are the two
countries
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 which increased,
while
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 Australia
along with
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Turkey
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's
energy
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 consumption experienced a downward trend.
Additionally
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,despite a small drop in the
last
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year
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,
Turkey
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 still remained one of the top
countries
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 with the most
energy
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 consumed With regard to the renewable
energy
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 usage of Iceland and
Turkey
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,Iceland stood at almost 45% in 1997 which
then
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 increased significantly through
of
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the 13-
year
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 period to approximately 70% in the
last
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year
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.
Likewise
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,
Turkey
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 used almost 40% of renewable power in the first
year
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 which
then
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 increased to a peak of over 40% before dropping gradually to under 35%. Turning toward the remaining
countries
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 where less amount of
energy
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 was consumed.As for Sweden,5% was the amount of
energy
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 consumption in Sweden which afterwards went up to 9% in 2010.
In contrast
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,the Australian consumed around 9% in the first
year
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 which
then
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 decreased slowly to under 5% in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, turkey, energy, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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