The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
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Contained in the illustration is the information pertaining to the brick production for the demand of construction             From an
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perspective, the process commences with digging the clay, moves through many stages of pressing in the shape mould and culminates with packaging
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for delivery.             The procedure proceeds with looking for the clay by using the digger. After that, all the clay will be moved to the roller to separate the metal grid from the mixture of sand and water. The ensuing steps involve manufacturing the raw
bricks
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by pouring the combination of sand and water into the
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or moving them into the container and using the wire to cut
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into a rectangular shape.              Turning to the remaining stages, it can be observed that the total number of
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will be carried into the oven for drying in around 1 to 2 days. The following step involves putting the
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through two kilns with different temperatures ranging from moderate level(200
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oC) to high level (870 oC-1300 oC). Before packing, the
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are
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cooled
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the chamber for 2 to 3 days.
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, trucks will deliver all of the products to the construction industry.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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