The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.

The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.
The chart shows changes in
yearly
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the yearly
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number of rentals and sales of films in various formats from 2002 to 2011. The most striking
difirens
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difference
between the numbers throughout the years is a consistent drop
of
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rentals.
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number
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the number
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of rentals
gone
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from just above 180
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thousand
in 2002 to just 50
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thousands
thousand
in 2011.
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, DVD sales
constistently
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consistently
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from 2002 to 2007
hiting
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hitting
an
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high of 210
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thousand
units sold.
Unfortunately
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after
that
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that,
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the sales fall
top
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to
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just 180
thousend
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thousand
at the end
of a given period. VHS started at
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a serios
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serios
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series
serious
number
80
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of 80
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thousand
units sold
at
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in
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2002, being the second biggest position at the shop, but it fastly
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shrank
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to only
somewere
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somewhere
around 10
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thousand
discs and
gone
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went
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out of
assortment
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the assortment
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in 2006.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Rentals
  • Sales
  • Formats
  • VHS (Video Home System)
  • DVD (Digital Versatile Disc)
  • Blu-ray
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Rise
  • Market changes
  • Digital downloads
  • Physical formats
  • Over the years
  • Annual
  • Comparison
  • Impact
  • Technological advancements
  • Shift
  • Predictions
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