The chart below shows the annual number of rentals and sales (in various formats) of films from a particular store between 2002 and 2011.
The chart shows changes in
yearly
number of rentals and sales of films
in various formats from 2002 to 2011. The most striking Add an article
the yearly
difirens
between the numbers throughout the years is a consistent drop Correct your spelling
difference
of
rentals. Change preposition
in
Overall
number
of rentals Correct article usage
the number
gone
from just above 180 Wrong verb form
went
thousends
in 2002 to just 50 Correct your spelling
thousand
thousends
in 2011. Correct your spelling
thousands
thousand
Meanwile
, DVD sales Correct your spelling
Meanwhile
constistently
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consistently
risen
from 2002 to 2007 Wrong verb form
rose
hiting
an Correct your spelling
hitting
all time
high of 210 Add a hyphen
all-time
thousend
units sold. Correct your spelling
thousand
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after Add a comma
Unfortunately,
that
the sales fall Add a comma
that,
top
just 180 Correct your spelling
to
thousend
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thousand
at the end
of a given period. VHS started at Correct article usage
a serios
serios
number Correct your spelling
series
serious
80
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of 80
thousend
units sold Correct your spelling
thousand
at
2002, being the second biggest position at the shop, but it fastly Change preposition
in
shrinked
to only Correct your spelling
shrank
somewere
around 10 Correct your spelling
somewhere
thousend
discs and Correct your spelling
thousand
gone
out of Wrong verb form
went
assortment
in 2006.Correct article usage
the assortment
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