Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Nowadays, there is a common belief that experimentation can be done on
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animals.
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on
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bad and should be prevented. I absolutely agree that
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will be a project
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before scientific discoveries are published and announced. The main reason why the
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, it can be
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. The goal of the
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the reaction of the sample.
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want to make a vaccine or medicine, they
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to get a
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usually
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a mouse during experimentation because of availability, and on some
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occasion
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they
use
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as a human.
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still alternatives without using an animal in our
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role
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future
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the advancement of technology, scientists can
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when they
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development
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of medicine. They
use
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software
or
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to draw
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to
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,
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, not
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with
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developer when they want to
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reasearch
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a real condition during the
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assumtions
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assumptions
and the
result
can be used in future without
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doubt
. All things considered, using an animal to
experiment
is legal action when the researchers want to develop a product that can be useful for everyone.
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to simulate a project development to replace
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using an animal in experimentation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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