Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an and unsatisfactory job or shorted of money others argue that is better to try and improve such situation discuss both views and give your own opinion

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the fact that
people
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keep improving
thier
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their
career
as much as they can,
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some
people
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at the same stage of the
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will discuss both points of
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and
at the
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will express my opinion. in terms of the first perspective that "some
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keep staying at the same
career
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one hand they have their
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reasons some of them are the location of the
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beside the home.
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some ladies prefer to have a
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in
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city and
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doesn't matter if the
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descriptions
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or not.
secondly
sort of
people
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don't have good educations, so they must
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accept any
career
,
such
as
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poor family they put their children
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any
job
like cleaning, farming and driving.
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that the most majorities of employees that
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know,
they
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challenging
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with
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each other to get the super situations, and they never ever accept any contract that has
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, and instance of that they are many reasons for
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a perspective, some of them are
firstly
the human being like to keep improving in whole his life in all of
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,
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many families
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decided to move to
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city for improve their
career
and their lifestyle financially. in conclusion
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that i prefer to build my
career
modestly and that will motivate me to
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more and more
efforts
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to
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my
job
and i will not be accepted
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job
that
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me low
incomes
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,
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i
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will try to
have
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several
of
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courses to get good positions.
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