You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you write a letter to your friend.In the letter: •give detalis about the concert •describe how you won the tickets •explain why you 've chosen your friend to go with you

Dear Shahrizoda I have something important to say to you.I have a great offer
for
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for you
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.I just won two tickets to a
concert
.I want to go to
this
concert
with you. I went to the supermarket
this
morning to buy bread.
Then
when I went to the cash
registor
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register
to pay for the bread.I saw the
lateria
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material
later
.
Next
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I bought lateria .But
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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I was not lucky.I was very sad. But I took a risk and bought another
lateria
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later
material
.I was lucky
this
time. I won two tickets to
BTS
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the BTS
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concert
. I think you are a big fan of
BTS
. I saw
BTS
notebooks and clothes when I visited your house.
That is
why I want to go
the
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to the
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concert
with you.I know how much of a
BTS
fan you are .I think you will be very happy with
this
offer.I am sure that the
concert
will be enjoyable with you . If you agree with my offer contact me on
instagram
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.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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sincerely Asal
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure the letter follows a logical flow, starting with an introduction, followed by the main content, and ending with a conclusion or a call-to-action. Consider using clear paragraph breaks to enhance readability.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use more connectors and transition words to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, making your letter easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task clearly. Ensure you provide details about the concert (who is performing, where and when it is), describe how you won the tickets in more depth, and elaborate on why you've chosen your friend more compellingly.
Task Achievement
Aim for a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Considering the context, maintain a friendly and enthusiastic tone, but also aim for a bit more formality in structure and language used.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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