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You have just won two tickets to a concert and want to invite your friend to go with you.Write a letter to your friend. In the letter: give details about the concert describe how you won the tickets explain why you have chosen your friend to go with you.

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Dear Abbos , I am writing to invite you to
concert
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the concert
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. It is going to be amazing.Because, first of all,
concert
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the concert
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 is
planning
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planned
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 to
hold
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be held
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 in the HUMO arena. In
this
concert
world's
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the world's
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 famous singers are performing.
Moreover
, the best musicians will be
in
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apply
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there too.That's why it
wil
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will
 be awesome. Yesterday I saw
one
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a
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 boy who was
saling
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selling
 lotteries.There
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were
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was
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were
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 many
people
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few people
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 but nobody won the prize.And I went there I bought one of
lottery
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the lottery
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 which had
prize
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prizes
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.It was nice.Because it was cheaper than in sales cost and
also
 I saved my money. If I hadn't won the lottery, I would have bought the tickets for twice the price. I am going to go to  the
concert
 with you because everybody knows that
if
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you are my best friend who is closer than others. I hope that you will accept my offer. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Og'abek
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Greeting and Closing
Ensure your letter begins and ends appropriately. Consider using 'Dear [Friend's name],' at the beginning and a more personal closing than 'Yours faithfully,' when writing to a friend.
Logical Structure
Try to focus on one idea per paragraph. For example, dedicate one paragraph to the concert details, another to how you won the tickets, and a third to why you've chosen your friend to attend with you.
Coherence
For a more cohesive letter, use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly. Expressions like 'Furthermore,' 'However,' and 'Because of this,' can make your writing flow better.
Complete Response
Provide more specific details about the concert (e.g., the date, the performers' names, and the type of music). This will help achieve a more complete response.
Suitable Writing Tone
The tone of your letter is generally suitable for writing to a friend. However, consider using more informal language and expressions to make it sound closer and more personal.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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