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The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the means of transport in the city of
Edmonton
,
also
 supported by a table that
provide
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 the reasons for car usage in said city.
Overall
, cars represent the most
common
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 used
mean
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means
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for
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of
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 transport, with almost
a
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apply
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half of the population opting for
this
 choice.
Secondly
, the Light Rail
Transist
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Transit
 System or trains compound roughly a quarter of the mobility choices, followed by
bus
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buses
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 and cabs being used in the same proportion (10%).
It is clear that
 the people of
Edmonton
 prefer to drive their own
vehicules
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vehicles
,
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 than depend on the public methods of transportation. As for the reasons for the former statement, commuting to work is the most popular with 55%.
Although
 other activities would play important roles as well,
such
 as taking their children to school (40%) or for
bussiness
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business
 purposes (45%). Only a tiny percentage (15%) of the citizens of
Edmonton
 use their
car
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cars
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 for recreational
activites
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activities
.
According to
this
 analysis, it is safe
to conclude
 that
people
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the people
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 of
Edmonton
 are opting for private ways of transport in order to
fullfil
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fulfil
 daily tasks related to work or family.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words edmonton with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transportation modes
  • car ownership
  • proportion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • transportation habits
  • environmental awareness
  • government policies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • congestion
  • environmental quality
  • future implications
  • adapt
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