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Some people say that it is better to work for larger company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

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The way of doing business and providing the services is not limited to a few
companies
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 now. Some people argue that it is better to
work
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 in big
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,
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 others oppose it.
This
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First,
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working in a large corporation makes our profile and resume voluminous. If we
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 in a multinational corporation,
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 the opportunity of getting selected during profile screening and other selection procedures is high. The interview panellist has an inclination towards profiles which have a past history of working in
a large
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large companies
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companies
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, and not towards those who served in small-garage associations. Every large organisation would like to recruit
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employees who have worked in
companies
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 with the same structure, values, and ethics.
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being associated with a large company
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 doors for exposure to other domains. These
companies
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 usually
expertise
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 in various technical domains like
Artifical
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Artificial
 Intelligence, Machine Learning, digital, and other marketing domains. If an employee does not like the monotonous
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 in the current project, he has the flexibility to get certified and upskill in other technologies, and switch his project, that lacks in small
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 which
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in
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one domain and area. My friend,
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, who works in an MNC switched his career from being a Quality Assurance Analyst to a Website Developer.
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, large
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 expose employees to big projects. Big projects requiring
work
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 on recent platforms and tools with international clients and stakeholders, which increases both the technical and communication skills of an associate. It teaches them other life
morals-teamwork
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teamwork
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 and
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 social connections, thereby making them more tolerant towards others' behaviour, attitude and religion.
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, people working in large corporations are 90% more resilient towards negative criticism as compared to those working in small
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. Fourth, large
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 have a robust structure, which usually does not get affected by losses and financial instability in the
market
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. These
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 operate smoothly
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 and provide their services even when
market
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 conditions are not favourable and
market
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 shares are down. In small
firms
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, we can expect a shift of management and sudden closures, which is not the case in
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bigger
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. By and Large, large
companies
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 have pros and are a suitable place to
work
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due to
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 stability, high exposure and robust structure. It provides more opportunities to
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 as the system never breaks
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market
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 shifts.
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To further improve your essay, strategically use a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas and ensure transitions between paragraphs are more fluid. This would elevate the coherence and cohesion of your essay.
task achievement
For task achievement, ensure every paragraph conveys a clear point that directly supports your overall argument. Incorporating a wider variety of specific examples and possibly counterarguments could further strengthen your essay by providing a more balanced perspective and demonstrating a deeper understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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