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The pie charts provide information about rates of electricity consumption by raw materials in Australia and France between 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts provide information about rates of electricity consumption by raw materials in Australia and France between 1980 and 2000.
#information #rates #electricity #consumption #materials #australia #france
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The pie charts illustrate information about statistics of
electricity
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 consumption by raw materials in
Australia
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 and
France
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 between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
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,it is evident that the biggest number of
units
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 of
electricity
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 by fuel source in
Australia
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 was coal,
whereas
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France
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 had nuclear
power
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. To commence with the biggest unit of
electricity
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 in
Australia
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 was coal, which made up approximately 50, %.
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, total production accounted for 100
units
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 and
then
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 in second place, there were similar numbers
such
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 as natural gas and hydropower, which comprised 20,
consequently
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.
Furthermore
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,
Australia
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 had 170
units
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 of total production in 2000.The biggest amount of statistic was coal, which made up 130 and the second one was hydra
power
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, which accounted for 36. When it comes to the information of
France
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, in 1980 total production was around 90
units
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,which comprised 25 for natural gas and coal,
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 oil with 20 and nuclear
power
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 with 15. In 2000 there was a trend for nuclear
power
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, which comprised 126
units
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. It may be concluded that
Australia
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 and
France
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 had the biggest differences in
units
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 of
electricity
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 by fuel between 1980 and 2000.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, australia, france, units, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • electricity consumption rates
  • raw materials
  • comparison
  • changes
  • overall trends
  • differences
  • Australia
  • France
  • 1980
  • 2000
  • information
  • rates
  • consumption
  • provides
  • between
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