The tables below give statistics on the number of Indonesian students in Australia and the sectors they are studying in. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give statistics on the number of Indonesian students in Australia and the sectors they are studying in.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart depicts the amounts of Indonesian pupils studying in
Australia
between 1994 and 2001.
Also
, the table provides details of the number of Indonesian students in each sector during
this
period. In general, what stands out from the graph line is that the trend of total students from Indonesia in
Australia
has increased and from the table that most scholars of Indonesian in
Australia
are in ‘higher education onshore’. Looking at the detail in the graph line, pupils from Indonesia studying in
Australia
started at 11,125 in 1994 and ended at 19,000 in 2002. It was a significant rise but it was a sudden dip in 1998 with 17,715 and in 2000 with 17,888. Turning to the table, most scholars chose ‘high education onshore’ as their preferred subject of study. Starting with 1997 and ending with 9,907 were considered a slight increase. It had the same trend as ‘higher education offshore’ which started at 210 and ended at 577 during
this
period. Meanwhile, two sectors saw a stable decrease from 1997 to 2001, there were ‘schools’ which began with 3,021 and finished at 1,629 and ‘ELICOS’ which started at 4,612 and ended with 1,868. ‘Vocational education’ declined between 1997 and 2000 from 4,294 to 3,764, before rising significantly to 4,638
at the end
of the period.
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