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Đề bài IELTS Writing Task 1 Greenhouse gasses trap energy from the Sun: The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.

Đề bài IELTS Writing Task 1 Greenhouse gasses trap energy from the Sun: The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.
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The given picture illustrates how
the
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Solar energy is trapped and
etained
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retained
detained
 by
the
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greenhouse
gasses
.
Overall
, it is the complex stages
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that includes
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includes
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include
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 many
combustion
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combustions
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 of
fossile
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fossil
fules
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fuels
files
 from human activities that
muntify
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quantify
 the greenhouse
gasses
. The process begins with being produce
gasses
, it can be seen that there are many
differnet
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different
way
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ways
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 to
increased
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increase
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 the toxic
gasses
. The main point is
from
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apply
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the
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that
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 deforestation exacerbates the process
off
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of
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cutiing
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cutting
 down trees
that
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which
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 could lead to the
absorrting
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absorption
 of
Co2
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CO2
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. Not only that, the extra parts of carbon dioxide come from the industry activities that
also
 often emitted the
green house
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greenhouse
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gasses
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gases
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gasses with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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