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Band 4

The diagram below shows how leather goods are produced

The diagram below shows how leather goods are produced
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the picture
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
process
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 of manufacturing leather which
include
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includes
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 eleven steps in the first
stage
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 of the
process
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, animal
skin
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 is dried using
a
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apply
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ventilation before being delivered to the factory using a lorry after reaching
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stage
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this stage
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, it
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then
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is then
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 put into a container for washing an animal
skin
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 addition
of
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apply
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water and lime are added
while
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 washing
in
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apply
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the
next
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Next
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stage
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soaking
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is soaking
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 of animal
skin
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 is done using a only a lime water in a flat large container
furthermore
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, the
skin
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passed
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passes
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 through the roller machine for flattering before it takes back into
soaking
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the soaking
a soaking
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process
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 but
this
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 time a new material is added
such
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 as tannin vegetable matter with water
afterward
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afterwards
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 polishing is done on the animal
skin
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 before taken by the lorry in the final
stage
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 of the
process
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, the lorry delivered animal
skin
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 to the factory before
it
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it has
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 been used on
makingnew
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making new
 products for customers
overall
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, it is vividly manifested it is
linear
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a linear
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process
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,
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beginning
begining
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beginning
 with
drying
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the drying
a drying
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 of animal
skin
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 and ending up with making new products for customers

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, stage, skin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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