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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

#tourists #places #conditions #sahara #desert #antarctic #visit
. As for me, travelling is always a good idea and travelling to
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 desert or
Antarctic
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the Antarctic
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 could be the best experience in your entire life. There are a lot of benefits
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such
 kind of an adventure. First of
all
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 it is not typical, it is about changing the limits and improving yourself as a person with strong character. Choosing
such
 a location means that you have earned enough money and your lifestyle is really
intresting
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interesting
. You are brave enough to do that and have all
equipment
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that is
 needed for
such
expedition
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an expedition
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. But there are
also
 some disadvantages
in
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such
kind
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 of
travells
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travel
. First
off
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 all, they are really expensive and it is really hard to get there. You should receive some permissions and gather documents for visiting
such
 places.
Also
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 you need to have a support team which will help you during the
travell
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travel
. But it is deffenitly worth seing. I am following
Academic
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 Vernadsky Station page
in
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 Instagram and it is one of my dreams to get there and see by my own eyes
that
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beautifull
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beautiful
 nature and penguins, which are living near the station. By the way, a famous
ukrainian
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Ukrainian
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architector
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architect
 Slavko Balbek was there a year ago and built a great monument which
symbolize
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ukrainian
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the ukrainian
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 typical khata. I guess it is really amazing.
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, you are able to see the Nothern brightness in that part of the Earth. So,
to sum up
, if you have an opportunity to
travell
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travel
 in some wild places: do not think, just do it!
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task achievement
Focus on directly addressing the question by presenting the advantages and disadvantages more systematically. Ensure your essay responds clearly to all parts of the task.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure of your essay by planning paragraphs around key points. Start with an introduction, follow with separate paragraphs for benefits and disadvantages, and conclude by summarizing your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words more effectively to improve the flow of your essay. Phrases like 'Firstly,' 'However,' and 'In conclusion' help guide the reader through your argument.
task achievement
Although personal opinions are valuable, ensure your essay uses a range of sources and examples to support your points. This shows a broader understanding of the topic.
general
Proofread your essay to correct grammatical errors and improve clarity of expression. This will enhance its overall professionalism and readability.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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