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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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The pie graphs illustrate the average
energy's
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energy
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 consumption in Australian
household
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households
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 and the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions resulting
of
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from
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 these
enery
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energy
 used.
Overall
, the most significant proportion of
energy
 consumption
are
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is
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 water heating and heating which
togather
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together
are accounts
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account
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 for nearly three quarters,
whereas
 the
least
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lowest
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 ratio of using
energy
 is lighting and cooling.
In contrast
 , water heating and other appliances together
comprises
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of
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apply
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exactly
a
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apply
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half of green gas emissions .
In
addition
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 cooling
is
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uses
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 the least amount of
using
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apply
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energy
 and
produce
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produces
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emission
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emissions
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.
Energy
 use by water heating comprises of a third Australian
household
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households
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.
Also
, produce roughly
third
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a third
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(32%) of gas
emission
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emissions
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.
while
 heating
use
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uses
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 42% of
energy
 but it produce
emission
 15%.
On the other hand
, lighting and refrigeration produce double
amount
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the amount
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 of consumption
represent
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representing
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 8% and 14 % respectively.
In
addition
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addition,
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 cooling is the least amount of
energy
 using and
produce
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produces
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emission
 which comprises
of
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apply
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2% and 3% respectively
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, emission with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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