It is sometimes said that ‘travel broadens the mind’. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In
this
generation, there are some people
who believe other words and customs easily. From my perspective, I partly agree with the statement. However
, there are some people
who do not trust
blindly by the words shared by third persons. On the other hand
, there are few public trusts the people
easily without experiencing it in real-time. So, I will discuss both sides of the agree and disagree part.
Starting from the agreed point of view, In this
era, there are few people
who trust
other citizens blindly without knowing their background. The main reason why these people
accept the explanation given by the third party is because,
those Remove the comma
apply
people
cannot afford to experience it. For example
, most of the business chairmans said that they initiate the trade by getting advice from other people
, who do not have to business background. As a consequence
, they failed in their first attempt. Anyhow, they overcome the problem by making their strategy for the future.
On the other hand
, still, they are a special group, who trust
the situation by experiencing them in real time. After they experience the scenario, then
they will analyse the situation, and whether the factors are true or false. If they find it true, Then
they proceed with the idea or else, they do not even think about the idea in future also
. For example
, most multinational companies will do research on their program and whether they need to start the project or not. As a result
, by analysing numerous factors, they will get to know whether the project will result in profit or loss.
In conclusion, In this
era, we can see both groups who believe in words as well as
people
who trust
my experiences. In my opinion, I suggest that people
to analysis the scenario by checking with a trusted website, if they cannot afford the situation, or else, if they can afford then
give it a try, and find the result.Submitted by jeevesh001 on
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Task Achievement
Focus on the prompt's main question about 'travel broadens the mind', but your essay discusses people's trust in words and experiences instead. Ensure your essay directly responds to the given topic.
Coherence & Cohesion
Introduce the topic clearly in the first paragraph, stating your opinion explicitly. Conclude your essay by summarizing your thoughts and restating your stance.
Task Achievement
Develop your points fully with examples specifically related to 'travel and mind broadening'. Avoid discussing unrelated examples or general behavior patterns.
Coherence & Cohesion
Organize your essay with clear paragraphs, each introduced with a topic sentence. Ensure your arguments flow logically, leading the reader through your reasoning.
Task Achievement
Use examples that clearly support your argument. Real-world, personal, or hypothetical examples are effective if directly relevant to the question.