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The line chart shows the trends of employment in the USA and predictions to the future.

The line chart shows the trends of employment in the USA and predictions to the future.
#line #trends #employment #usa #predictions #future
The line graph presents the employment trends in the United States of America
along with
 the predictions for the future.
Overall
, there will be a significant increase
on
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 the figure of
employees
on
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in
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 the services
field
. It will
surpassing
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surpass
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 the
quantity
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number
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 of
workers
 in both Agriculture and Manufacturing by 2025. At the beginning of the given period, the
number
 of people that worked
on
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services
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the services
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 company was around ten.
However
, there was a relatively stable increase
during
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from
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 1975 to 1979. Since 1979, the
number
 of
workers
on
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in
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 that particular
field
significantly
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has significantly
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increase
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increased
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 and
predicted
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is predicted
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 to continue growing until
reach
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reaches
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 its peak in 2025
by
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with
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the
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a
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number
 of 90
workers
.
In contrast
 with the positive sentiments on the
number
 of
workers
 in services
company
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companies
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, agriculture suffered an extreme decrease
of
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employees
 in 2025.
In between
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 1975 and 1979, the
numbe
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number
 was stagnant
on
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at
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 80
employees
. Meanwhile, since
then
 the
number
 of
employees
 constantly decreased year by year.
The
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A
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 result of it, it is predicted that in 2025, only around ten people will take
an
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agriculture as their
field
 of profession. The manufacturing industry had a distinct trend from
other
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the other
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 two
field
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fields
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 of
works
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work
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. The figure showed that there is
the
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a
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 similarity
on
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in
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 the
number
 of
the
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apply
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employees
in
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at
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 the beginning and the end of the given period, both around ten people. An incline was experienced between 1975 and 1980,
however
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however,
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 there
was
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has been
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 a gradual decline since
then
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, field, workers, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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