the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar charts illustrate the data about the destination of
UK
postgraduates and graduates (excluding full-time work
)in different four categories in 2008.
Overall
, the highest number of graduate
students
in the UK
were left for further
study in 2008. From the first bar graph, we see that 17,735 thousand graduate
students
are abandoned for part-time work
. whereas
, only 2,535 thousand postgraduate pupils are left for part-time jobs.For voluntary work
3,500 graduate
teenagers were gone in 2008 as well and 345 postgraduate admissions were also
gone.
From the second bar chart, we observed that the maximum number of postgraduate students
departed for only further
study in the UK
. While
just 1,625 postgraduate students
remain in the unemployment category. Also
, for the unemployment category 16,235 graduate
teenagers remain in the year of 2008.
To sum up
, the biggest number of graduate
students
are left for part-time work
, voluntary work
, and further
study in the UK
throughout the period.Submitted by prajaktavibhute898 on
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