the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar charts illustrate the data about the destination of

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postgraduates and graduates (excluding full-time

work

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)in different four categories in 2008.

Overall

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, the highest number of

graduate

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students

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in the

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were left for

further

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study in 2008. From the first bar graph, we see that 17,735 thousand

graduate

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students

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are abandoned for part-time

work

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whereas

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, only 2,535 thousand postgraduate pupils are left for part-time jobs.For voluntary

work

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3,500

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teenagers were gone in 2008 as well and 345 postgraduate admissions were

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gone. From the second bar chart, we observed that the maximum number of postgraduate

students

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departed for only

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study in the

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While

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just 1,625 postgraduate

students

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remain in the unemployment category.

Also

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, for the unemployment category 16,235

graduate

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teenagers remain in the year of 2008.

To sum up

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, the biggest number of

graduate

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students

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are left for part-time

work

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, voluntary

work

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, and

further

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study in the

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throughout the period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, further".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, work, graduate, students with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

157 words

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the charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Discussion In many countries, more and more men are staying at home to look after their children when women work full-time. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

In many families nowadays, both parents work and pay people to look after their children. Some people believe this is not good for families. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Mobile phones and the internet could have many benefits for older adults. However, this age group uses technology the least. What are the benefits for older adults of using mobile phones and the internet? How can we encourage them to use this new technology?