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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The given line graph illustrates data about the total number of markets closed and opened in one country between the period of 2011 to 2018.
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, we observed that most of the stores were opened from 2011 to 2018. In 2011, around 8500
thousand
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shops
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 were opened.
Whereas
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 around 6500
thousand
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shops
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 were closed in that
year
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. In the next
year
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, the expenditure on opened
shops
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 was significantly decreased at 4000
thousand
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. And the total of closed
shops
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 gradually declined to 6000
thousand
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.
Then
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 in the
year
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 2013, the value of the number of openings and closures of
shops
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 sharply climbed at 5000
thousand
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 and 7000
thousand
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 respectively. In 2015, the value of the number of
shops
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 dramatically bottomed out at around 500 hundred.
Then
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 in the next
year
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, it sharply climbed to 5000
thousand
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. From 2016 to 2018 amount of closed outlets remained steady at around 5100
thousand
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.
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, the value of the opened shop slowly decreased to 3000
thousand
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 in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand, shops, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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