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Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#communication
It is argued that verbal interaction works more effectively than writing contact. From my perspective, both are equally crucial in
communication
. I will shed light on my viewpoint in the following essay. On the one hand, vocal
communication
 enables individuals to emotionally connect with each other.
People
 can easily express their feelings and emotions through
the
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 tone of voice and body language.
It’s seem
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 to me that body language is like the unsung hero of
communication
.
Moreover
, listeners can
understanding
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understand
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 others
throughout pay
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 attention to gestures, facial expressions and posture during
conversation
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the conversation
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. When
people
 interact face-to-face, their messages can completely
deliver
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 and
understand
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.
On the other hand
, writing interaction can
also
 be
influential
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 method in certain circumstances. Especially in the workplace,
this
 mode of
communications
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communication
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avoid
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 misunderstanding and
exchange
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exchanges
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 information more clearly
such
 as in
email
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emails
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,
documents
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and documents
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. The writing is formal academic and appropriate in education.
Additionally
,
people
 can archive in
next
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 generations. In conclusion, oral and
writing
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communication
 are useful in our lives,
people
 can easily communicate with others in certain
way
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ways
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depend
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 on purpose to create
communication
 efficiency.
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task achievement
The essay provides a balanced viewpoint of both spoken and written communication, which directly responds to the task. However, to improve your score, ensure that each paragraph is focused on a single clear idea, backed with specific examples or evidence to make your argument more convincing.
coherence cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, focus on linking ideas more effectively. Use a range of linking words and phrases to show relationships between ideas, such as 'despite,' 'whereas,' or 'in contrast.' Also, ensure paragraphs are well-structured, with a clear topic sentence followed by support and examples.
task achievement
The essay lacks specific examples and details in several parts, especially in the discussion of written communication. Providing real-world examples or studies can greatly enhance the persuasiveness of your arguments. It would also help in reinforcing your viewpoints and making your essay more compelling.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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