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The given charts describe responses of undergraduate and postgraduate students to a questionnaire about a university library. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given charts describe responses of undergraduate and postgraduate students to a questionnaire about a university library. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the annual income from
sales
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 of four different types of video games which are named mobile phone, online,
consoles
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 and handheld devices, from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
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,
this
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 chart illustrates that the
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consoles game
Fix the agreement mistake
number of console games
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 decreased during
seven
Correct determiner usage
the
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- year period and the rest of them experienced
increasing
Correct article usage
an increasing
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 trend between 2000 and 2006.
This
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 chart indicates that the income from
sales
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 of handheld devices and
consoles
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were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 $ about 11 and 6
billion
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 in 2000 and there
are
Wrong verb form
were
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 no
sales
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 for mobile
phone
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phones
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 and online
game
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games
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in
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apply
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this
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 year. Over
six
Correct article usage
the six
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 next years, the
sales
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 of
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consoles game
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console games
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 fell
into
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to
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 $3
billion
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, but mobile phone games dramatically increased to just over $6
billion
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 in 2006 from zero in 2000. handheld devices and online games
also
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 rose to $15 and 5
billion
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 in 2005. These items kept their increasing trend during the next year and reached
to
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apply
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$ 18 and 7
billion
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 in 2006.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, consoles, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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