The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.
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These pie charts , give the information about differences between girl's and boy's activities that they participate in .
Overall
,
although
a large number of
girls
participate in reading , reading is not a popular activity for
boys
and that number is almost zero. regarding
first
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chart , most
boys
prefer to play computer games with a 34% participation
rate
than other activities ,playing basketball is the second popular leisure by almost 26%
rate
of the number of
boys
. As you can see , basketball followed by soccer which exercised by 17%. skateboarding and listening to music are less preferable activities , chosen by 11% and 10% of
boys
respectively. As the chart shows, reading is the least popular cultural activity among
boys
, representing only two per cent. Turning to the second chart, almost most
girls
choose dancing for their leisure
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%
rate
of participation. Unlike
boys
reading is in second most popular cultural activity by 21 % among
girls
. computer games and netball , they are ranked third and fourth respectively by order 16% and 15%.
However
, the
rate
of participation in listening to music is the same in both charts ,
this
includes 10% of the leisures of
boys
and
girls
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words girls, boys, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • gender difference
  • similar participation rates
  • traditional gender roles
  • trends
  • impact
  • parental influence
  • extracurricular activities
  • accessible
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