The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
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The bar chart compares the
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of people in
further
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education in three separate years in Britain based on their gender and
also
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whether they are educated part-time or full-time.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
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of both female and male who educate part-time is far more than those educating full-time.
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, an increase is experienced in their
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after each decade, irregular to their gender. In 1970/71, almost 1 million men were studying part-time in
further
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education, compared to only just above 100,000 men who were studying full-time.
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, the
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of part-time female
students
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year was ten times as high as those who were studying full-time at roughly 750,000 and 75,000, respectively.
Following
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, in 1980/81 and 1990/91, the
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of full-time
students
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rose considerably, reaching about 250,000 for both male and female
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.
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part-time attendants became less popular among men during the period shown, the
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of female
students
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who attended
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education witnessed a significant increase, peaking at approximately 1,100,000 in 1990/91.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, further".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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