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Band 2

The media should include more stories which report good news. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Nowadays, the
media
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 frequently have a
lot
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 of information about everything around our
life
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 and
ofcourse
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of course
 it surely
have
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has
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 two
side
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: bad and good
news
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 and I think it’s fine with both of them.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, it is important to
media
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 report stories
which
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apply
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about
goods
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good
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news
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. In my opinion, they certainly help
ourself
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us
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 a
lot
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. On Facebook or
youtube
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YouTube
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, there are numerous
of
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apply
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stories which have good things like
people
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 always have kindness,
generous
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apply
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and they help a
lot
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 of poor
people
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. It made me believe in
human
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humans
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,
in
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and in
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 social
life
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, and it
asl
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also
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 helps
people
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 with their hurt
in
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apply
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soul
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souls
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,
makes
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and makes
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people
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 feel happier.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, the bad
news
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are
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is
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 not better than the good
news
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 but it
was
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is
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 needed in our social
life
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. They make us
to
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realize that everything
was
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is
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 not as good as it look.
Besides
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 that, they warn us
that
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apply
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never
believe
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to believe
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 in someone or something
with
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apply
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100%.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the
media
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 should have a
lot
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 of stories which report good and bad
news
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 to
everyong
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everyone
gain
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to gain
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 more
life
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skill
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skills
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,
knowledge
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and knowledge
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. I hope that
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media
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the media
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 will upgrade in the near future.

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Introduction Improvement
Work on developing a clearer introduction that outlines your stance on the prompt clearly. The prompt asks for your position on whether more good news should be reported, and your introduction should clearly state your opinion.
Body Paragraph Enhancement
Enhance your body paragraphs by developing your ideas more fully. Use specific examples to support your points about the benefits of both good and bad news. This will make your argument more compelling and complete.
Logical Structure
Improve the organization of your essay by ensuring there is a clear logical flow between paragraphs. Use transitional phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs coherently.
Conclusion Improvement
Revise your conclusion to better summarize your main points and restate your stance on the issue. A strong conclusion reinforces your position and ties all your ideas together.
Grammar and Vocabulary Enhancement
Address minor grammatical errors and explore a wider range of vocabulary to articulate your points more effectively. This will add clarity to your writing and make your arguments more persuasive.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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