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the grap below shows the contributio of three sectors-agriculture, manufacturing and business and services to the uk economy in the twentieth century summerise the informatio by selrcting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relavant

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The given bar graph illustrates the agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services sectors'
contribution
 to the UK
economy
 in the twentieth century.
Overall
, the
contribution
 of
agricultural
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the agricultural
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 and manufacturing sectors
for
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 the
economy
had been
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stayed steadly during the first half of the
20 th
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20th
 century,
while
 it
was
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declined in the
secound
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second
 half ,
by contrast
contribution
 of
business
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the business
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 and financial sector increased drastically over the whole period. In detail, in 1900
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector was given nearly 50%
contribution
 to the
economy
 of
UK
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the UK
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, and
with in
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within
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 next 25
year
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years
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 that increased slightly to just over 50%, and
thereafter
, it
had fallen
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 drastically to record nearly 10 % in 1975 and
with in
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within
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 next 25 years it had
further
 decreased to post nearly 2% in the
year
 2000.
On the other hand
,
business
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the business
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 and
finacial
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financial
 services sector contributed only around 5%
fot
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to
 the
economy
 of
UK
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the UK
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 in the
year
 1900 and
however
, that increased significantly over the whole period to record just above 35 % in the
year
 2000 , and that was the highest
contribution
 for the
economy
 in that
year
 compared to the other sectors.
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Introduction and Conclusion
Ensure that your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion. In your introduction, briefly present what the graph shows. In your conclusion, summarize the main trends or comparisons.
Logical Structure
Work on developing a more logical structure for your essay. Use paragraphs to separate different sections - one for the introduction, one for each sector being discussed, and one for the conclusion. This will make your essay easier to follow.
Supported Main Points
Support your main points with specific data from the graph. For example, when you mention the change in contributions from sectors, include specific percentages to support your statement. This makes your argument stronger.
Complete Response
Make sure to comprehensively answer the task by covering all points indicated in the prompt. Include comparisons between sectors where relevant, and ensure that your essay provides a complete overview of the trends shown in the graph.
Clear and Comprehensive Ideas
Strive to present your ideas clearly and comprehensively. Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to articulate your points more clearly, avoiding repetitive language.
Relevant and Specific Examples
Include relevant and specific examples by referencing the data points from the graph. Your essay would benefit from more detailed comparisons and examples to clearly illustrate the trends and changes over the century.

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