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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 chart showcases the various types of
transportaion
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transportation
 used by children in the years 1990 and 2010 and how frequently they were used.
According to
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 the
figuers
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figures
, the least common means of
transportaion
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transportation
 in 1990 were cars,
whereas
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 it
has been
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 the most popular of all in 2010. Children in 1990 went to
school
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 on foot most of the
times
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time
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. 20 years later, the number of students walking to
school
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 has decreased drastically,
however
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, it remains the second
amognst
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most
 other types of transportation. The next most frequently used way to go to
school
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had
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 been taking the bus in 1990, which has changed the least during the next 20 years and sits at the third. Almost 6
millions
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million
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the
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 same number of students used cycling and a combination of walking and taking a bus to
school
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. Based on the chart can see that cycling has dropped significantly in 2010, becoming the least used means of transport.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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