In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays majority of young people
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not have the habit of watching TV
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or
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print media.
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phenomenon and put forward some possible solutions to tackle
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issue
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. First and foremost, the obvious reason
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young people hesitate to follow
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news
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is lack of
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, in the concurrent world, youngsters follow
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life
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the academic burden.
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, university
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have to spend at least 80 hours per week to complete
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studies,
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, they would not have sufficient
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to read or watch
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, since part-
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jobs are on the
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increase
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, they might not interested
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their spare
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to follow
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following
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news
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instead
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of
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hanging out
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with friends.
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, it is undeniably true that teenagers are in the clutches of social media.
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, they lost interest in
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social issues.
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, there are some
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practical
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issue
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a great
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, governments should provide financial support to pay
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tuition
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for
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students
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. By doing
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students
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student
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would not
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to do part-
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jobs, in turn, the
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would
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be interested
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in politics and social issues.
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, academic institutions should encourage
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to follow
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news
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the news
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by allocating
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for
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read
news
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paper
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papers
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and watch TV.
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, the
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authorities
and
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organisations should involve youngsters in social activities. Since
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involve
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in social matters, they
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start to follow
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to
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be updated
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. In conclusion, lack of
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due to
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academic and financial
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are
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the obvious reason for
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issue
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. Ergo, involving social activities and
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news
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reading and watching in academics are the practical solutions to tackle
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issue
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