You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Nowadays majority of young people
does
not have the habit of watching TV Change the verb form
do
news
or read
print media. Wrong verb form
reading
This
essay will delve into reasons for this
phenomenon and put forward some possible solutions to tackle this
issue
.
First and foremost, the obvious reason for
young people hesitate to follow Change preposition
apply
news
is lack of Add an article
the news
time
. In other words
, in the concurrent world, youngsters follow feverish
life Correct article usage
a feverish
due to
the academic burden. For example
, university students
have to spend at least 80 hours per week to complete his
studies, Correct pronoun usage
their
therefore
, they would not have sufficient time
to read or watch news
. Add an article
the news
similarly
, since part-time
jobs are on the increse
among young Correct your spelling
increase
students
, they might not interested to spend
their spare Change preposition
in spending
time
to follow
Change the verb form
following
news
Correct article usage
the news
instead
of hangout
with friends. Correct your spelling
hanging out
Besides
, it is undeniably true that teenagers are in the clutches of social media. As a result
, they lost interest in real life
social issues.
Add a hyphen
real-life
Nevertheless
, there are some pracitcal
solutions to address Correct your spelling
practical
this
issue
in
a great Change preposition
to
extend
. Replace the word
extent
Firstly
, governments should provide financial support to pay tution
Correct your spelling
tuition
fee
for Fix the agreement mistake
fees
needed
Replace the word
needy
students
. By doing this
Fix the agreement mistake
students
student
would not Fix the agreement mistake
students
require
to do part-Wrong verb form
be required
time
jobs, in turn, the students
would interested
in politics and social issues. Add a missing verb
be interested
Secondly
, academic institutions should encourage students
to follow news
by allocating Correct article usage
the news
time
for
read Change preposition
to
news
paper
and watch TV. Fix the agreement mistake
papers
Lastly
, the authorites
and Correct your spelling
authorities
non governmental
organisations should involve youngsters in social activities. Since Add a hyphen
non-governmental
youngster
Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
involve
in social matters, they Wrong verb form
are involved
would
start to follow Verb problem
apply
news
to update
.
In conclusion, lack of Wrong verb form
be updated
time
due to
academic and financial burden
Fix the agreement mistake
burdens
are
the obvious reason for Correct subject-verb agreement
is
this
issue
. Ergo, involving social activities and integrate
Wrong verb form
integrating
news
reading and watching in academics are the practical solutions to tackle this
issue
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Task Achievement
To improve Task Achievement, focus on providing more specific examples to support your arguments. Rather than speaking generally about students and young people, offer anecdotes, studies, or statistics that demonstrate the trends and solutions you discuss.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, aim to connect your ideas more seamlessly. Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to show relationships between ideas. Also, consider organizing paragraphs so that each one introduces its main idea in the first sentence, followed by supporting information and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on varying your sentence structures to add complexity and interest to your writing. Complex sentences can help demonstrate your language proficiency and make your arguments more nuanced.
Coherence and Cohesion
Review and correct grammatical errors and typos throughout the essay. Pay special attention to subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and article use. This will enhance the clarity and professionalism of your writing.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example