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number of children who drop the scool is increasing in some countries.what are the reasons and solutions to overcome this problem.

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In the age
requiered
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required
backgrouds
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backgrounds
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decente
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decent
 education, an increasing rate of dropping
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out
 of college running through the world has sparked a
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discussion
,
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 some measures have been made aimed
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this
issues
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.
One
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society and
entreprises
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enterprises
 appreciate the talents
graduated
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who graduated
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 from top
universites
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universities
 and
equipped
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 with systematic theoretical knowledge, as can be seen,
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education is a paramount requisite in
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marketing.
However
, some negative outcomes increase
along with
such
 aspiration,
according to
 a
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 survey by CNN, every day almost 60,000 students
dropping
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 out of college. there are a variety of
factor
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factors
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behind
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, the prominent one is that
the
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competitiveness and false experience in school
ecilit
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Cecilia
psycholigical
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psychological
 the disability of
younster
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youngster
youngsters
 to continue
the
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 career.
Furthermore
, a myraid of unaffording
tuitions
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 and pensions
significant
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 a heavy burden to
indiviaduals
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individuals
 and even families, in other world, despite
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the development of
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the sociatle
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sociatle
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social
economic
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, there are a plethora of adolescents
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 to quit
from
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class.
ON
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dynamic
 society is influencing the valuation of
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millennium
, inspired by a large
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in
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