The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below

shows

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the

enargy

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energy

capacity

percentages

in gigawatts in 2015 and predicted 2040.

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, there will be

decreacess

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decreases

decreased

fosill

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fossil

fuels and nuclear

percentages

and

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increses

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increase

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wind and solar

percentages

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of the most

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noticeable

point

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is that the proportions of

fosill

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fossil

fuels and nuclear will

decreace

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decrease

. Looking more closely,

fosill

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fossil

fuels and nuclear had 64% of its percentage of energy capacity in 2015, but it will down to 44% in 2040. There will

also

slightly

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decreace

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decrease

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the

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percentage of nuclear energy capacity from 6% to 5% between 2015 to 2040.

On the other hand

, the

percentages

of wind and solar power

enegy

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energy

will increase. Specifically, the

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of wind

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for 5% in 2015, but

then

rose to 12%. And the share of solar power was only 2% in 2015, and it will be 18% in 2040. The final point to note is that the whole energy power will

increace

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increase

from 6.688GW in 2015 to 11.678GW in 2040.

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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A government has a responsibility to its citizen to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?

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Schools should use films, computers and games instead of books. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's world , private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most scientific research.Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.