The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts below
shows
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the
enargy
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energy
capacity
percentages
in gigawatts in 2015 and predicted 2040.
Overall
, there will be
decreacess
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decreases
decreased
in
fosill
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fossil
fuels and nuclear
percentages
and
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increses
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increase
in
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wind and solar
percentages
.
The one
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of the most
noticiable
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noticeable
point
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is that the proportions of
fosill
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fossil
fuels and nuclear will
decreace
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decrease
. Looking more closely,
fosill
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fossil
fuels and nuclear had 64% of its percentage of energy capacity in 2015, but it will down to 44% in 2040. There will
also
slightly
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decreace
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decrease
decreased
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the
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percentage of nuclear energy capacity from 6% to 5% between 2015 to 2040.
On the other hand
, the
percentages
of wind and solar power
enegy
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energy
will increase. Specifically, the
percentages
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of wind
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for 5% in 2015, but
then
rose to 12%. And the share of solar power was only 2% in 2015, and it will be 18% in 2040. The final point to note is that the whole energy power will
increace
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increase
from 6.688GW in 2015 to 11.678GW in 2040.
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