Every culture, throughout time, has recorded its history in one way or another. In what ways can history be passed on to the next generation? Why is history important to society?

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From the past, all cultures have recorded their
history
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in many ways throughout time.
This
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essay will discuss how we can pass to the next era and the effect of
history
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on
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society.
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with, we need to preserve former records as
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as
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,
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and make it
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to show them
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young people. A good example is museums. These days, we can see a lot of historical records at many museums and it is one of the
way
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we can learn about
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.
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Further more
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Furthermore
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, speaking of our lives, we should record them by movie.
Movie
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The movie
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can convey not only facts but
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atmosfares
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atmospheres
of cultures more than paper.
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, broadcasting about the records on TV or YouTube is
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effective
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way to spread historical
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knowledge
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. Many people are not willing to study by books
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, so I believe it will work. The main important importance of
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is that people can escape some fails.
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, in Japan, there a lot of region names
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came
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from certain disasters
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as
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earthquake
,
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tsunamis
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tsunami
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, and so on. Our ancients warned
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it's
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dangerous
to
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next
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generations and keep us from living there.
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, sometimes we can live safer than before. In conclusion, we need to convey our
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by
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the best way we can, and learn
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to live our lives better.
History
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History
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is not just
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one
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of the subjects
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school, but it makes human
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easier, so we should make efforts to tell them to
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the next
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generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oral traditions
  • storytelling
  • preserving
  • manuscripts
  • cultural artifacts
  • conserving
  • curriculum
  • contemporary
  • documentaries
  • commemorate
  • cultural consciousness
  • genealogy
  • ancestry
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